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Friday, November 23, 2012

Allegory of the Cave : Sonnet

In the dark, shadowy cave we kneel
What stands above we do not know
Secluded inside with such a muggy  feel
The world keeps on living while our life stays still down below

The shackles and chains restraining us from what reality holds up above
But we don't know any better but to stay in the familiar
Until it takes a leader to come show us higher knowledge from atop
One who has broken from the chain has been enlightened, he now mirrors his knowledge towards us

Unknowing the strength and weaknesses from what lay above the cave
We are hesitant whether to accept the challenge of reality
But we admire the freed prisoner for being brave
It just takes a simple enlightenment of knowledge to know that we do not live in a life of fantasy

Great change will occur when he who is enlightened 
But it is up to us whether we see the knowledge or choose to be frightened 


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24 comments:

  1. UnknownNovember 23, 2012 at 7:34 PM

    Really creative diction/structure selection Socorro! I especially like the last couplet

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  2. UnknownNovember 23, 2012 at 7:38 PM

    This sonnet really gives me a sense of the allegory. It was beautifully written and I feel that you spent a lot of time and effort on it. Great Job!

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  3. Ubi KimNovember 23, 2012 at 7:53 PM

    Your sonnet has deep meaning and it's well written.

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  4. UnknownNovember 23, 2012 at 8:59 PM

    Great job...i just love all the words you used!!...
    and it is very creative!! :)

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  5. UnknownNovember 24, 2012 at 9:43 AM

    You did a really good job and the sonnet structure is good as well :)

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  6. UnknownNovember 24, 2012 at 10:49 AM

    i agree with hayden on the final couplet. that was my favorite part :) i thought that there was a few spots where the rhyme scheme was off but overall you did a really good job!

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  7. UnknownNovember 24, 2012 at 11:16 AM

    I really like the line "Great change will occur when he who is enlightened
    But it is up to us whether we see the knowledge or choose to be frightened" its a very well thought out ending.
    The point of view as a prisoner is creative and it works well :) good job!

    Can you comment on my blog Please :)

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  8. bcastillorhsenglitcompNovember 24, 2012 at 11:43 AM

    I really like the use of diction in this poem. It flows very well and has a nice rhythm! Great job.

    http://bcastillorhsenglitcomp.blogspot.com/

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  9. RylandNovember 24, 2012 at 1:56 PM

    The premise as a whole is actually very similar to mine Socorro which I really like! All around you did a good job.

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  10. UnknownNovember 24, 2012 at 8:08 PM

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  11. Mackenzie GreeleyNovember 24, 2012 at 9:35 PM

    Remember that the sonnet also has to be written in iambic pentameter, the pattern of 10 syllables. I can see the thought used in the last couplet was to call to action out those who are on the border of becoming an intellectual. Really smart.

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  12. daniNovember 25, 2012 at 12:37 PM

    gooood job! the rhyming was great and the perspective was understandable. please comment on minee:)http://danig14.blogspot.com/

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  13. UnknownNovember 25, 2012 at 2:22 PM

    You definitely had a lot of great ideas and content within this sonnet, but I think that with such a great components this sonnet would only benefit if it were written in iambic pentameter (as Mackenzie stated earlier). Your sonnet has a lot of great points and I don't want you to feel as if you have to essentially start from scratch. All it needs is a revision here and there and your as good as done.

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  14. CWestNovember 25, 2012 at 4:42 PM

    I like the diction you used especially saying things like high and low it puts the image of a man climbing out of a steep cave in my mind. Very nice. Could you comment to my blog as well please?

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  15. AnonymousNovember 25, 2012 at 6:14 PM

    Great job socorro!:) you have great ideas on your sonnet!

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  16. UnknownNovember 25, 2012 at 7:31 PM

    i like it :) i enjoyed reading your sonnet! nice job socorro :D

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  17. daniNovember 25, 2012 at 8:16 PM

    great sonnet!
    i dont have questions on the book so far
    my blog is http://danig14.blogspot.com/

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  18. Sarah GutierrezNovember 25, 2012 at 9:13 PM

    there were a couple of bits where the iambic pentameter was off and there were either too many words that contrasted with the previous ones, but other than than, your ideas are solid and the sonnet is most excellent!

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  19. ruth sierraNovember 25, 2012 at 9:39 PM

    I love it(: It was like a short summary of the allegory.

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  20. JackieNovember 25, 2012 at 9:48 PM

    Loved it! Great sonnet...I really enjoyed it :)

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  21. UnknownNovember 25, 2012 at 9:49 PM

    Looks great, good structure and rhyming scheme. Also a good understanding of the Allegory of the Cave. All in all a good sonnet

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  22. UnknownNovember 25, 2012 at 10:43 PM

    Good job. Your sonnet was creative and I enjoyed your diction.

    http://marriagarhsenglitcomp.blogspot.com/

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  23. SneetchfaceNovember 26, 2012 at 1:02 AM

    I loved this! Seriously. I know I should say something constructive, but really it was just a pleasure to listen to :) BTW, is that Billie Holiday in the background?

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  24. UnknownNovember 27, 2012 at 7:14 PM

    Oh my gosh!! Socorro!! This is soooo great. I don't even know what to say. Great great great job!!

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